tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post5429782371356823876..comments2010-08-29T12:55:03.106-07:00Comments on Crimewrite.: Sallow SusanPatrick Zagorskihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10456150613035975535noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post-38395301917987508242009-05-11T22:41:00.000-07:002009-05-11T22:41:00.000-07:00"So if she couldn’t give the name away, she would ..."So if she couldn’t give the name away, she would keep it. Hold on to it tight."<br /><br />Really liked that part.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post-66694619923943334862009-04-19T12:41:00.000-07:002009-04-19T12:41:00.000-07:00Mrs. Martin, your comments are well received and p...Mrs. Martin, your comments are well received and part of what you wrote wasn't even a part of my intentionality. I'll take it into account and add some of those ideas to my process.<br />Thank you so much.Patrick Zagorskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10456150613035975535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post-48372851042801840642009-04-17T23:31:00.000-07:002009-04-17T23:31:00.000-07:00Susan (like so many of us) has reached a point of ...Susan (like so many of us) has reached a point of no return where she "turns the page" of her life and starts a new chapter. She is progressing, moving forward instead of regressing. The line "like a Hallmark card" was great in contrast with the anti-hallmark scenario. Your writing strategy used contrasts well to support the idea of much needed change--different cultures; language extremes; socio-economic diversity. Also Susan seemed 'real' and engaged my empathy. Keep writing because a problem ignored is a problem unresolved that is bound to grow worse. Peace!Judy Martinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post-40236361119555795032009-04-17T14:26:00.000-07:002009-04-17T14:26:00.000-07:00Things are really good actually. It's a good pass...Things are really good actually. It's a good passion. I just have to get back on track. I'm falling in love with my boyfriend and back in love with myself all at once.Patrick Zagorskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10456150613035975535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6848925019019460640.post-69482670907885653912009-04-17T13:37:00.000-07:002009-04-17T13:37:00.000-07:00I didn't know you liked to write! My favorite lin...I didn't know you liked to write! My favorite line: "Sometimes he wouldn't even speak English to her." Thats good.<br /><br />And sad story :( This isn't a symbolic reflection of <I>your</I> life is it? They say that most people have an increase in creativity during times of overwhelming passion. I hope you're okay :)happyhibisci@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13691139866195977478noreply@blogger.com